Wednesday, November 30, 2011

Heres to all the people who commented on my story fairytales?

Eh it's okay. You definitely need to work on grammar and punctuating correctly; there were a lot of examples of commas that should be semicolons. It's okay as a beginning paragraph, but I lost interest simply because I don't like mysteries too much. But the ending sentence leaves readers kind of intrigued to know more about Tracy's past, so good job there.

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